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Lesson 10 writing 2 Sample
Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they
should begin at least 7 years old. Discuss both views give opinions.
Some people think that children should begin
Some think they should begin at least 7 years old.
their formal education at a very early age. Meet/ interact with teachers
To fully develop their physical and mental well-
To learn greetings, punctuality, suitable behaviors being To know a sense of discipline
Not fall behind their peers in many aspects
(academic performances, physical activities)
To have more time to focus on their career
To save more money on tuition fees To have To earn more money
more quality time with their children
To avoid being a 昀椀 nancial burden To avoid depression
To prepare young children before their primary
To reduce pressure on kindergarten, pre school levels systems.
To create a generation of children who are familiar To reduce the requirement of facilities and
with school environments. To avoid stress and fear infrastructure on educational systems. when going to school Vietnam, China, Thailand, … New Zealand, Eu nations. Plan S V
Parents have time earn m Work, oney
Not w orry ab out i ncome
Avoid stress, not become a 昀椀 nancial burden
Do not su 昀昀 depression er
On the one hand, those who support the idea of very young children compulsorily starting their primary
education point to a widely observed bene 昀椀 t. It is believed that this educational method can allow
parents to have more time to work and focus on their career, meaning that they can earn more money.
Supporters of this notion also claim that thanks to extra and stable salaries, such fathers and mothers do
not worry much about income on a monthly basis and thus avoid stress or any mental issues related to the
lack of 昀椀 nance. This can be seen in Vietnam where children tend to go to pre school at the age of
about 1 year old, which lets their parents return to o 昀케 ces and continue their career.
There is a common belief that minors should enter schools as soon as possible while others argue that they
should only do this after 7 years old. Personally, I tend to side with the latter and I will explain why in this essay.
On the one hand, those who support the idea of very young children compulsorily starting their primary
education point to a widely observed bene 昀椀 t. It is believed that
this method can make young boys and girls more familiar with educational environment which requires a
higher sense of discipline and attention compared to their homes. Supporters of this notion also claim that
the repetition of activities including waking up early to go to school punctually, greeting their teachers and
listening to their teachers’ instructions can shape their behavioral patterns. This can be seen in primary lOMoAR cPSD| 48641284
students in almost Asian nations and it is believed that children become more obedient after a short period of learning at school.
On the other hand, proponents of delaying education among minors till the age of 7 often state that this
notion seems more advisable. A point in favor is that in modern families, almost parents lead an extremely
hectic lifestyle during the day time, leaving little hours to establish a strong bond with their children. In
other words, the idea of formal education at an early stage may decline opportunities to gain emotional
relationships as well as mutual understanding among family members. Instead, not only can allowing
children to go to school after 7 years old lengthen the time spent together within a family, but this also lets
them be more well-prepared prior to their 昀椀 rst days at school, both physically and mentally.
In conclusion, it appears to me that the stronger argument is in favor of children enrolling in o 昀케 cial
education after the age of 7, with the advantage of having more quality time with their parents and a fully
developing stage. This is provided that their parents’ work-life balance is ensured; otherwise, kids may be
left alone at home and su 昀昀 er isolation. Breakout Intro
There is a common belief that minors should enter schools as soon as possible while others argue
that they should only do this after 7 years old.
Personally, I tend to side with the latter and I will explain why in this essay. Body 1 (1 idea)
1 On the one hand, those who support the idea of very young children compulsorily starting their
primary education point to a widely observed bene 昀椀 t.
- Compulsory (adj), compulsorily (adv)
It is believed that this method can make young boys and girls more familiar with educational
environment which requires a higher sense of discipline and attention compared to their homes. - To require (V)/ need
- A sense of discipline/ attention
Supporters of this notion also claim that the repetition of activities including waking up early to
go to school punctually, greeting their teachers and listening to their teachers’ instructions can
shape their behavioral patterns. - To V punctually (V)
- To Shape SO’s behavioral patterns
This can be seen in primary students in almost Asian nations and it is believed that children
become more obedient after a short period of learning at school.
- To become more obedient (adj) lOMoAR cPSD| 48641284 Body 2
On the other hand, proponents of delaying education among minors till the age of 7 often state
that this notion seems more advisable. - To delay education
- To be more advisable/ admirable
A point in favor is that in modern families, almost parents lead an extremely hectic lifestyle
during the day time, leaving little hours to establish a strong bond with their children.
- To establish a strong/close bond with - an emotional bond - To form/forge a bond
- Frequently horses form a strong bond with their riders.
- To strengthen a bond >< TO break/destroy a bond
- To form/ maintain a strong bond with
In other words, the idea of formal education at an early stage may decline opportunities to gain
emotional relationships as well as mutual understanding among family members. Instead, not
only can allowing children to go to school after 7 years old lengthen the time spent together
within a family, but this also lets them be more well-prepared prior to their 昀椀 rst days at
school, both physically and mentally. - Prior to Ving, N/ before Conclusion
In conclusion, it appears to me that the stronger argument is in favor of children enrolling in o 昀
케 cial education after the age of 7, with the advantage of having more quality time with their
parents and a fully developing stage. This is provided that their parents’ work-life balance is
ensured; otherwise, kids may be left alone at home and su 昀昀 er isolation. - To enroll in education - To have more quality time - A work-life balance - To su 昀昀 er isolation Planning Ideas Body 1 Body 2 1 N V N V 2 N V N V 3 N V N V 4 N V N V 5 N V N V … … lOMoAR cPSD| 48641284 Vocabulary Noun Verb Adj Structure
Some people think that
children should begin their f ormal education at a very early age.
So me think they should begin at least 7 years old A or not The question as to wheth
er S V is a topic of public interest. The question as to wheth
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d i s a topic of public interest. The question as to whether
students can use mobile phones at school is a topic of public interest. lOMoAR cPSD| 48641284 Your essay Intro 1 Paraphrase the question 2 Your thesis Body 1 Topic sentence Sp 1 Sp 2 Sp 3 Sp 4 Body 2 Topic sentence Sp 1 Sp 2 Sp 3 lOMoAR cPSD| 48641284 Sp 4 Conclusion