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Besides convenience and usefulness, plastic brings many negative impacts to the environment, human health and the economy. Firstly, plastic pollution can cause many problems to human health. Tài liệu giúp bạn tham khảo, ôn tập và đạt kết quả cao. Mời bạn đọc đón xem!
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Writing THT2 – Week 2 – Students’ works
Besides convenience and usefulness, plastic brings many negative impacts to the
environment, human health and the economy. Firstly, plastic pollution can cause many
problems to human health. Burning plastic releases gas including many toxic substances which affects negatively to lu
ng, brain, heart and reproductive organs. One of the toxic
agents is dioxin causing cancers and birth defects. Moreover, microplastics may be inhaled or consumed thr
ough air or food that is found in the organs . Scientists report that
the average person could be eating up to 5 grams of plastic a week and this consumption
may lead to many disorders such as: loss memory, asthma and allergy.... Additionally,
plastic pollution also threats to ocean and wildlife. Plastic waste enters oceans and
causes loss space of living’s animals. According the data/survey of the United Nation,
approximately 8 million tons of plastic pollution comes to oceans each year and it’s
estimated that by 2050, there will be more plastic in our oceans than fish. In the land,
plastic is not decomposed and remains, so plants can not develop in this region.
Furthermore, plastic pollution has great economic repercussions ✅. Governments spend
large budgets on recycling and disposing of plastic waste. The most advanced
technologies are invented to accelerate plastic decomposition including biotechnology,
chemical technology, microbiology and multidisciplinary collaboration. For example,
scientists discover the microbiota and creatures digestive plastic quickly and safely. Along
with those, studying and producing the new material replacing single-use plastic consume
a lot of money of countries, especially developed ones. Because of the above, plastic
waste creates negative effects and becomes an enormous challenge in many fields of human living. Word count: 268 Ms. Tan Clearly-structured paragraph
Adequate supporting sentences for each main idea
Pay more attention to the use of article for countable nouns and some word forms
I agree that plastic is undoubtedly one of the most beneficial and convenient inventions
of the 20th century. It has revolutionized many industries and brought immense
convenience to our daily lives. However, it is also true that the widespread use of plastic
has resulted in severe environmental, social, economic, and health consequences. The
plastic waste and pollution have become a global problem, affecting wildlife, oceans,
and even human health. Plastic waste is also costly to manage, putting a burden on
economies and communities. Therefore, while acknowledging the benefits of plastic, it is
essential to recognize its negative impacts and take steps to reduce its use and
minimize its environmental and social harm. The responsible use and management of
plastic are crucial to ensure sustainable development and protect our planet's future. Word count: 130 Mr. Bach
Although plastic is one of the most economical and practical inventions of the twentieth
century, its severe environmental, social, economic, and health consequences are
undeniable✅. Plastic waste has significant environmental impacts, including pollution of
the soil and marine environments. Plastic pollution in oceans has caused a decline in
the number of marine species, leading to a loss of diversity in marine ecosystems✅.
Socially, an increase in plastic waste can negatively impact urban aesthetics.
Spontaneous landfills can be found in many areas, including residential neighborhoods
and markets, where domestic waste is collected and thrown into rivers and road
surfaces, causing a loss of urban beauty. Economically, treating plastic waste is costly,
and its harmful effects on the environment, trees, and creatures can lead to economic
decline.??? The health impact of burning plastic waste for treatment can result in toxic
gas production, including dioxin and furan, which can negatively affect the endocrine
glands, reduce immunity, and even cause cancer. Word count: 157 Vu Ngoc Anh Thu
Lack of linking devices and parallelism, i.e. socially – economically – Adv
It is true that plastic has the biggest impact on the environment, economy, and people's
health. First, is the environmental impact, the two biggest issues are air pollution and
water pollution. For example, in Africa or Asia, there are large garbage of plastic waste,
which are processed by burning, and the toxic gas from them is released into the
environment, causing air pollution✅. And plastic trash combines the huge garbage
causing rivers pollution, water pollution impact to people of environment or sea animals.
Second, plastic impacts the economy✅. The government budget has to pay a large sum
of money for plastic waste treatment every year because they cannot be decomposed
for hundreds of years, which costs money for them very much. Not to mention, large
investments for organization research on how to solve waste plastic. Finally, it has a
health impact. According to Harvard University research using food or water in plastic
increases the risk of cancer and other serious diseases more than by 55% in adults. So
despite plastic is among the most economical and useful inventions of the twentieth
century. But they also cause several consequences for the environment, economy, and health.