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People living in the 21st century have a be琀琀er quality of life than the previous centuries. To what
extent do you agree or disagree?
Due to the advanced technology, human’s quality of life => quality of human life / quality of life for
humans in 21st-century bene昀椀ts and conveniences than ever. It's debatable whether or not modern
individuals live be琀琀er lives than their older genera琀椀ons, I par琀椀cally agree that the present era bring for
human plenty of huge edges accelera琀椀ng the quality of life and overwhelm the ancestors’ era.
=> The debate over whether modern individuals live be琀琀er lives than their predecessors are ongoing. I
personally agree that the present era brings numerous signi昀椀cant advantages…
On the on hand, inven琀椀ons are commonplace in today's world and have totally revolu琀椀onised
the way we live. Our lives have been greatly improved by technology, which has enhanced con琀椀nously in
and conven琀椀onal agricultural techniques were unable to meet the rising demand for food (lỗi run-on.
Idea chưa rõ và liên kết khi đang nói tân 琀椀ến công nghệ tự nhiên qua cn nông nghiệp rồi đạt dc nhu cầu
thực phẩm? thầy nghĩ idea e chưa rõ nên nó làm bài viết e hơi mâu thuẫn => nên khi e nói câu ChatGPT
thì nó lại càng ko liên quan tới agriculture của e, nên đổi ví dụ). However, thank to advancement in
diversity of dis琀椀nguished 昀椀eld, like digitaliza琀椀on and medicine, it is undoubtedly easy for human to
confront numerous issues happen. For instance, chat GPT is an obvious digital gadget invented for
assis琀椀ng human simplify all sorts of access to informa琀椀on. For instance, ChatGPT is an obvious digital
gadget invented to assist humans in simplifying access to all sorts of informa琀椀on.
On the other hand, the experience from historical events show the signi昀椀cance of human right
and majes琀椀c ideology. Hundreds of years ago, notwithstanding the discrimina琀椀on toward gender and
races was s琀椀ll exist , for example, women were prohibited from di昀昀erent authori琀椀es support themselves
as a normal ci琀椀zens, people with colored skin also being restricted to access to educa琀椀on and limited the
right to live, people had been always dealing with all prejudices and made progress againts discontents
in order to leading to a society with peace and less con昀氀icts.=> dài, rối, chia nhỏ ra chưa hiểu hết ý. In
addi琀椀on, in the past, several theories, which are not able to be proved by scien琀椀sts as a accepted
de昀椀ni琀椀on, were created so that human wouldn’t stop to accelerate the development of science to higher
level. To illustrate, Galileo, who was known for a astronomers, in contrast to geocentrism, Galileo used
observa琀椀ons of planetary satellites to reinforce heliocentrism. Therefore, the discovery of certain
individual can in昀氀uence greatly to the world, which is a poten琀椀al to s琀椀mulate the growth of human society.
1 ví dụ rồi p琀椀ch sâu vào, đưa 2 cái mà thấy chưa sâu ý nào luôn é
THƯỜNG CÁI NÀO TỐT HƠN ĐƯA VÀO ĐOẠN SAU => NÀY E ĐƯA RA TRƯỚC NGTA NGHĨ CÁI ĐÓ OK HƠN THÌ ĐÂU DC.
In conclusion, both eras have the merits to assist to human’s life, wheras the modern genera琀椀on
s琀椀ll faces with plenty of detrimental that comes up from ar琀椀昀椀cal inven琀椀ons, older genera琀椀ons play an
vital role in building the founda琀椀on to facilitate and advance the quality for younger people to live in.
older genera琀椀ons play a vital role in building the founda琀椀on to facilitate and advance the quality of
life for younger people. I think the convenince that we are enjoying in the present s琀椀ll have a
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Thầy nghĩ em nên viết lại mà suy nghĩ kĩ ý tưởng, đưa idea vào trong mở bài luôn để lát vào thân bài pitch cái đó thôi.
MB: In the 21st century, advancements in technology, healthcare, and living standards have
undoubtedly improved the quality of life for many individuals… VÍ DỤ THỬ DỊ Á ngta nhìn ra liền à em
cbi nói về healthcare giúp ích con người ntn trong TK này
The given line graph illustrates the growth rate of all quarters in 2021 of each domains
concluding industries , construction, agriculture, foestry, 昀椀shery and service.
Overall, it can be seen that increasing rate of industry and construction reached the
highest position among other 昀椀leds. In addition, all of 昀椀gure for the rest catergories also
grew gradually throughout the period. However, the percentage of growth in di昀昀erent
sorts, excluding the 昀椀gure for 昀椀shery, foestry and agriculture, witnessed a dramatic
decline in the end of second quarter and begin to grew noticeably in the next quarter.
From the 昀椀rst quarter to second quarter, the GDP growth rate increase 11,4%, the
percentage of industy and construction soar sharply, peaking at 10,36% while the 昀椀gure
for both service and complexes of agricuture, foestry and 昀椀shery rise slightly by 7,8%
and 7.5% respectively. An upward trend was seen in the early of forth quarter, the
growth rate. score and give feedback on ielts task 1 writing in each criteria